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Richbee's avatar

The flight of fire flies

Never to be seen

Habits bull dozed

Time tracks

Progress.

Richbee's avatar

I miss catching fireflies.

Stanley Wotring's avatar

The geography and tragedy of progress!

Patris's avatar

what a juxtaposition of mood, Jonathan, and beautifully done. just as it happens, no extraneous words.

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thank you, Patris.

Gary Spangler's avatar

The churning of bulldozers leveling creation. I still have memories of the bulldozers that were part of shallow, bituminous coal mining. Giant draglines excavated the coal while bulldozers leveled the wreckage of what had once been a large area my brother and I explored. It seemed fit to add lots of cane sugar to the fuel tanks.

Jonathan Potter's avatar

“Daddy won't you take me back to Muhlenberg County / Down by the green river where paradise lay? / Well, I'm sorry my son, but you're too late in asking / Mister Peabody's coal train has hauled it away” (John Prine)

Gary Spangler's avatar

Prime practiced economy of utterance.

Kristina (Kris) Richards's avatar

Sad. So common.

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Hey there! Thank you

Mahdi Meshkatee's avatar

“Bulldozers leveling the land” feels dense and heavy… almost unbearable.

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thanks Mahdi. You’re right, but for me it’s infused with paradox, irony, mixed feelings. Hopkins is instructive, especially maybe God’s Grandeur.

David O'Boyle's avatar

The peaceful calm of nature interrupted by the oncoming bulldozers. Steinbeck has a scene like this in the Grapes of Wrath. This made me think of that. When that comparison surfaces I think the writer has succeeded.

AliceEm's avatar

Oh God you break my heart. Here's a foto of 'meadowlark ln' apropos of this for you https://www.instagram.com/p/CpynJ6NsUCw/?igsh=MTB3a3B3OGJuYnNvMg==