Great pictures, and a great little poem to go with them. It had the beat, the rhythm, of some of Dylan's early songs, and I particularly liked the last five lines - especially this couplet:
The dizain form and your deft handling of it are quite satisfying. I like the minimal and/or idiosyncratic use of capitalization and punctuation in the series as a whole -- cutting against the formality of the fixed form for a rough-hewn feel. In this one, I love the handling of the Kafka and Shakespeare allusions (Hamlet and Gregor Samsa, what a pairing!) And the turn (volta?) that occurs at midpoem is deft and feels quite genuine. The happy ending feels real and believable. This series keeps surprising with how much emotional ground it covers in such small footprints.
Great pictures, and a great little poem to go with them. It had the beat, the rhythm, of some of Dylan's early songs, and I particularly liked the last five lines - especially this couplet:
"the tradewinds of uncanny servitude
bring sunrise as a broken interlude"
Keep up the good work, my friend.
Thank you, Martin, I'm glad you caught the Dylan feel. I now realize I was feeling it, too, but hadn't thought about it.
That cloud looks like a giant cruise boat. That would give me Kafkaesque anxiety. Nice pics and poem 😊!
Thank you, Carole. I love your cloud interpretation 🙂
Absolutely loved this one
Thank you, Megan
The dizain form and your deft handling of it are quite satisfying. I like the minimal and/or idiosyncratic use of capitalization and punctuation in the series as a whole -- cutting against the formality of the fixed form for a rough-hewn feel. In this one, I love the handling of the Kafka and Shakespeare allusions (Hamlet and Gregor Samsa, what a pairing!) And the turn (volta?) that occurs at midpoem is deft and feels quite genuine. The happy ending feels real and believable. This series keeps surprising with how much emotional ground it covers in such small footprints.
Thank you, Rufus, I appreciate your catching onto the Hamlet/Samsa pairing and the volta.
Ah, really nice one Jonathan! Lovely.
Thank you, Ron
This is so beautiful
thank you
Oooh, I love this! Such a fabulous poem to parallel your photos! Powerful! 💜
Thank you so much, Wendy