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Richbee's avatar

Cast I Ching.

Water ripple.

Bobber sinks

Real play

Dinner for two.

Jonathan Potter's avatar

This made me chortle with delight.

Richbee's avatar

My rainbow trout from Diamond Lake, Oregon.

Fred Hanson's avatar

Nice

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thanks, Fred. I love it when you come around old pal.

Rufus McCain's avatar

I think this is one of the loveliest anniversary poems you've written because it accomplishes something difficult: it speaks honestly about a danger without making the relationship itself feel endangered. The poem's confidence lies precisely in its willingness to name what must be watched.

The title, "The Tug," is wonderfully understated. At first we assume it's about the pull between two people, but by the end we realize it's also the inward tug from intellect toward feeling, from control toward receptivity, from strength toward tenderness.

The opening immediately introduces paradox:

"Our strength could be our undoing / if we're not careful, my love."

That's not a common anniversary sentiment, but it feels a propos. "Strength" isn't being criticized; it's simply recognized as something that can become excessive. That lands squarely in Hexagram 28. The problem isn't weakness. It's a structure carrying more weight than its supports were meant to bear.

Then comes the turn: "The doves outside are cooing."

Birds again—but notice how different they are from the blackbirds of the previous two poems.

The blackbirds were vigilant. These doves are receptive. They don't defend territory; they embody affection. The world has changed species because the poem's emotional task has changed.

I especially like this couplet: "... and we know how to take off the glove / of strong thought..."

That's a striking image. A glove protects. It also prevents direct touch. Calling thought a glove suggests that intellect is not the enemy; it's simply something one sometimes removes in order to feel the world more directly. The image is fresh enough that it doesn't collapse into the familiar head-versus-heart dichotomy. You aren't rejecting thought. You're taking off one glove.

Then comes what I think is the poem's deepest movement: "...and let ourselves feel it — / the tug — and then reel it."

This is beautifully ambiguous. What exactly is "it"? The love? The moment? The emotional pull? The anniversary itself? The answer is yes.

Then the isolated phrase — the tug — works almost like a heartbeat. The em dashes make you pause long enough to experience the thing before naming what happens next.

Many happy returns, you two.

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Another crescendo of a comment, Rufus. Many thanks.

Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

Rufus, I read your comments on this wonderful poem before I wrote mine and I borrowed a little from them because they seem so accurate to me. I hope you don't mind

Rufus McCain's avatar

I’m honored that you found me worthy to steal from, Martin. I officially grant you carte blanche — with the caveat that I reserve the right to sneak into your plethora of wise and insightful comments like a thief in the night and return you the same honor (among thieves) at some point.

Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

As at matter of honour I grant you the same privilege. Will you be writing a book soon about Jonathan's poetry?

Rufus McCain's avatar

Maybe something along the lines of The Autobiography of Alice B. Toklas.

Peter Whisenant's avatar

Like the play on “take off the glove” as opposed to the expected “take off the gloves.” Very nice.

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thanks Peter, I was hoping someone would note that.

Deborah Owens's avatar

💙

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thank you, Deborah

Laura Lynch's avatar

Love this! Thank you! 😊

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thank you, Laura

Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

I was drawn to this little six-line poem because I have always loved love poetry. I think it is something that’s sadly neglected in this high-tech, intellect-driven era in which people seem to be in danger of losing their humanity. And interestingly, Jonathan seems to be aware of this also, and begins his love poem with a warning both to himself and his beloved that their “strength” could be their undoing if they are not mindful about the manner in which they relate to each other going forward in what appears to be a very strong and communicative relationship.

“Strength” isn’t being criticized here, it is simply being recognized as something that can become excessive, even though it is essential in order to survive in this world as it is, and in relationships with others in it. It means that like crows, doves, or other creatures … we adapt realistically to our environment. But our environment isn’t always harsh and there is a right time “to take off the glove of strong thought” and feel the tug (or dove) of our own humanity.

So “The Tug,” is about the pull between of attraction two people. But it is also about the inward tug from intellect toward feeling, from control toward receptivity, from strength toward tenderness, and getting that balance right when needed

What a marvellous, realistic love poem this is, and one that bodes well for the future of this relationship! All that remains to be said, is: “Congratulations Jonathan & Natalie on your anniversary. May your love endure for as long as forever is!”

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thank you, Martin. I appreciate your thoughtfulness and keen sensitivity, as always.

Patris's avatar

A beauty.

Gary Spangler's avatar

Stunningly beautiful Jonathan! Seeing the fishing rod on the right in the image suggested a strong tug could imply tugging one another’s hearts and souls. Happy Anniversary!

Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thank you, Gary

Kathleen Hobbs's avatar

Lovely

Gary L Taylor's avatar

This is beautiful. I loved it.

John Edward Keough's avatar

This is wonderful.