Absolutely right. The syntax and verbal cross stitch of this piece are incredible, but its acoustic properties really push it into masterpiece territory.
I've read it myself and then finally listened to your delivery, Jonathan. I think I'm being lulled to sleep by your haunting repetition of "deep in the dresser, deep in the dresser." If the goal of poetry is to make me feel, yours is a very successful poem.
Thanks so much for your kind attention, Mike. It’s extremely gratifying and I’m now thinking about changing the name of my newsletter to “Masterpiece Territory” :)
Bravo, Jonathan!
Thanks, Paul 🙏
I especially like these lines:
"To where many mythic meanderings and musings run
Down rabbit holes when the game is afoot."
I like how the syllables sound on "many mythic meanderings and musings."
Absolutely right. The syntax and verbal cross stitch of this piece are incredible, but its acoustic properties really push it into masterpiece territory.
Thank you, Neil 🙏
Oh this is just joyous. I loved the sound of it in my head and I’m going to come back and give it the full vocal treatment later. This deserves it.
I've read it myself and then finally listened to your delivery, Jonathan. I think I'm being lulled to sleep by your haunting repetition of "deep in the dresser, deep in the dresser." If the goal of poetry is to make me feel, yours is a very successful poem.
Thanks so much for your kind attention, Mike. It’s extremely gratifying and I’m now thinking about changing the name of my newsletter to “Masterpiece Territory” :)
Just ... Wow
Thank you, kind sir
Beautifully done and expressed Jonathan!!
Thank you, Reena!
Very nice!
Thank you! 🙏
Kind of wonderful here. The hidden socks, the running. That foot you love..
Thank you, Patris.
I totally enjoyed this poem, Jonathan. You really socked it to us. Well done, indeed!
😁🧦🌞 thanks, Martin