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Stanley Wotring's avatar

There are so many good lines in this poem but this is my favorite: “the midnight sky

of the dark universe at the bottom of my trouser pocket.”

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David Kirkby's avatar

Now that really made me laugh Jonathan. The "dark universe at the bottom of my trouser pocket" and trading God for Twinkies. (Not that we have Twinkies in Australia - we are a civilised country - but having survived a few trips to the USA I do get the idea).

Cheers mate

Dave :)

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Gary Spangler's avatar

Appreciative of both the humor and the truth in this statement, Jonathan.

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Ronald Drimmel's avatar

In an ironic twist of humor and truth, astronomers believe that the universe started out by expanding at an accelerated rate, a period they call "inflation".

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Jonathan Potter's avatar

This might require an expanded revision.

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Ronald Drimmel's avatar

It's such a good poem I'd be afraid to touch it.

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Susan Hickman's avatar

This is such a good poem. What an opening!!

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Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thank you, Susan. I’m getting inspired by your train travelogue, too.

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Susan Hickman's avatar

Thank you Jonathan. I appreciate the feedback. 🙏

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

That gave me a laugh.

I love "My fingers beak like an early bird"--"beak" as a verb is wonderful.

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Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thank you, Margaret Ann

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Michael Herzog's avatar

“but I have traded God for these Twinkies

so I know they are worth much more.”

Love this commentary on the state of our society, so true a

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Jonathan Potter's avatar

Thanks, Mike. I believe I wrote that as a young denizen of Walla Walla or maybe shortly after college living in Seattle. Recently unearthed it and liked it.

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Michael Herzog's avatar

That sounds like something that you would have stated when we were discussing capitalism. I always told people I was very successful in retail because of the old adage “know your enemy”

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