Sunrise 8/12/23
triolet
Article voiceover
The sunrise on the land beyond The river flowing to the sea Calls to mind the day that dawned, The sunrise on the land beyond, Before the dams when salmon spawned, No gate, no border, lock or key, The sunrise on the land beyond The river flowing to the sea.
Marvelous!
This is a well-written triolet, my friend. Despite being so simple, the form can be quite deceiving, making placement very awkward when not executed carefully. However, you've caused it to flow quite nicely, Jon.