Nice one. Like how your "interwoven" rhyming scheme ties together sequential stanzas. Would work well for a collaborative work where each poet adds a stanza.
This is excellent! It makes me wonder why travel publications don't do more commissions with poets. Your NOLA sunrise poems and photos have made me FEEL more like actually making my way to that city than any travel blog ever has or could.
This is pleasing. I applaud the imagery. The rhyming scheme is interesting and you do it well, though, in honesty, its not one with which I feel any strong affinity - however that may be my failing, in fact it probably is. I haven't analysed it in any formal manner but my sense was of problems with the meter, though perhaps, again, this is my failing and it wasn't supposed to use one.
Regardless, in the main I enjoy your poems and I like the notion of a series on one theme. I think some focused exploration is a sensible strategy for learning, improvement and modelling which can help others.
So, thank you again for your contributions, encouragement and help for others who love poetry and aspire to write it at least competently and preferably with merit.
Thank you, sir. I agree the meter gets wonky, but all I can say is that that’s how the voodoo muses would have it this morning. There may be a future revision when the muses agree to smooth out some of those rough edges.
Absolutely beautiful and the sunrise pictures are so beautiful they help to set the scene. Reminds me a bit of Rod Mc Kuen. Do you know his poetry? It's really wonderful stuff.
Jonathan I hope it was ok to post a poem in the comments? I really wasn't thinking, I was swept away by the sounds and absence of sound of the words and world's they built 🫶
This poem is a symphony of stimulation and we are lucky to have Jonathan as our conductor.
Thank you, Stan 🙏
..
Who for words are never at a loss
making each poem new and fresh
and bright and green as rain washed moss.
Nice one. Like how your "interwoven" rhyming scheme ties together sequential stanzas. Would work well for a collaborative work where each poet adds a stanza.
Thanks, Ron. We should try that one of these days.
Wow is this wonderful. Literally. Filled with wonder.
Like you were being baptized in the waters of a gleaming irreverent but rich life. Thanks for taking us with you.
hit me / jitney LOL
Thanks, XP 😁
I'm beginning to think the sun rises and sets with you, Jonathan. Lovely NOLA.
Thank you, Tina 🙏🌞
Got there in the end. Nice.
Thanks, James
This is excellent! It makes me wonder why travel publications don't do more commissions with poets. Your NOLA sunrise poems and photos have made me FEEL more like actually making my way to that city than any travel blog ever has or could.
Thanks, Jason. Great idea! The Poetry Travel Bureau
the Poetry Travel Bureau also sounds like a great name for a secret organization of poetry superheroes!
This is pleasing. I applaud the imagery. The rhyming scheme is interesting and you do it well, though, in honesty, its not one with which I feel any strong affinity - however that may be my failing, in fact it probably is. I haven't analysed it in any formal manner but my sense was of problems with the meter, though perhaps, again, this is my failing and it wasn't supposed to use one.
Regardless, in the main I enjoy your poems and I like the notion of a series on one theme. I think some focused exploration is a sensible strategy for learning, improvement and modelling which can help others.
So, thank you again for your contributions, encouragement and help for others who love poetry and aspire to write it at least competently and preferably with merit.
Take care. Stay safe. ☮️
Thank you, sir. I agree the meter gets wonky, but all I can say is that that’s how the voodoo muses would have it this morning. There may be a future revision when the muses agree to smooth out some of those rough edges.
✌️ 👍 🙆
Absolutely beautiful and the sunrise pictures are so beautiful they help to set the scene. Reminds me a bit of Rod Mc Kuen. Do you know his poetry? It's really wonderful stuff.
Just one from Rod:
I Roll Better With the Night
Wrestling with the morning,
I come out the loser.
Lying on the mat
Looking up between
the thighs of yesterday's,
I imagine myself,
being elevated,
picked up
held--not let go.
Friendly arms around me
Firm friendly hands
slipping slowly
into my back pockets,
pressing hard and holding me.
Then one hand spreading
in a cat-like move
across my back--
hands becoming arms
arms becoming all
and everything.
I roll better
with the night.
I come up easy
falling back
only when I'm tired
and happy.
~Rod McKuen
Thank you, Penny. I love the McKuen connection.
You are so welcome. 🫶💫✨️💛🌟
This is like jazz.
Thanks, Mark. Yezzz!
You got a grin out of me at the end. You are masterful. What delightful rhythm and what a cornucopia of nouns, among other POS.
Thanks, Mike, your grin makes me grin again.
Jonathan I hope it was ok to post a poem in the comments? I really wasn't thinking, I was swept away by the sounds and absence of sound of the words and world's they built 🫶
Love it, thank you.
Awesome again.
Thank you, Karen
oh how i love new orleans
no place like it